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Guest · Posted: Wed Sep 13, 2006 3:35 am Post subject: "That man"

this is a story I wrote two weeks ago...

http://www.starwarsepica.com.pe/thatman.htm

it's pretty short, but I like it... any comments? =P

Aaron_Nichols · Admin Joined: 12 Sep 2006 Posts: 375 Location: HERE

It is a good story. There are only a few errors and the story line is really good. I would give it a 8/10

Guest · Posted: Wed Sep 13, 2006 4:33 am Post subject:

cool, thanks... although my english teacher gave me a 9.5 <.<...

what errors did you find? =O

Aaron_Nichols · Admin Joined: 12 Sep 2006 Posts: 375 Location: HERE

There were a few spelling errors, and you switched tenses in one of the lines....I dont know which one right now.

Guest · Posted: Wed Sep 13, 2006 4:41 am Post subject:

there were no spelling errors according to my teacher.... >.> plus, I used the spell check... and the tense thing... uh... weird, maybe I made a mistake while transcripting it from paper to PC.... if you could tell me which sentence it is I could change it =D

Aaron_Nichols · Admin Joined: 12 Sep 2006 Posts: 375 Location: HERE

I am not seeing the tense thing now.....I must have said it wrong in my head, as I do that sometimes I know. I am sorry to worry you GG XD

Guest · Posted: Wed Sep 13, 2006 4:46 am Post subject:

hahahah, okay, then my story deserves a 10, haha

jk... I just wanna see what the other members think of it, though