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PostPosted: Thu Sep 21, 2006 9:11 pm    Post subject: The Lost Hope  Reply with quote

((ok the first part sucks because it was the first thing I wrote, but it gets better))

The Lost Hope

Death, it’s a natural part of the cycle of the Force, but for six-year-old Addon Shin’se what had just happened wasn’t natural. Addon had dark brown hair and blue eyes that shone like ice crystals. What he had just seen, no one should ever have to, no matter what age they are. Addon’s family had just been cut down in front of him by a Jedi. His dad, his mom, and his brother. It happened in a 100-story building. He hadn’t known what to do, so he ran. That’s all he could have done. Addon ran to the one person who could help him, Lord Nebs. Addon found Nebs fifty-four levels down.

“Jedi….Dad,” is all he could get out before he burst out in tears.

The tall man looked down at Addon with a look of mild displeasure.

“Go,” is all he said.

Addon looked up at him bewildered. “But-but-,” he stuttered.

“Go,” Nebs said with a hint of anger.

His plan hadn’t worked and he wanted nothing to do with the child.

Addon did as Nebs had said and ran down the last forty-six levels to the street. He sat down in the ally next to the building and cried.

He didn’t know how long he was there when a female voice echoed down the ally.

“Addon, is that you?”

He looked up to see his best friend’s sister, Tarah, who was 13. Tarah had dirty blond hair and brown eyes. Addon nodded his head.

“What's wrong,” Tarah asked sitting down beside him.

Addon spilled out what had happened. Tarah didn’t know what to do so she said, “Why don’t you come with me. My mom won’t mind.”

Addon got up slowly, wiped the tears from his eyes, and followed Tarah.

Addon and Tarah walked into her house. Tarah went straight to her mom and told her what Addon had said. As they were talking Addon’s best friend, Sarae, walked out of her room. Sarae had blond hair and bright green eyes.

“Addon what are you doing here,” she asked walking over to him.

Addon told her what had happened. She said she was sorry for him. Just then, her mom walked over.

“I’m really sorry about what happened, Addon,” she said, her kindly eyes looking down at him. “But you can stay with us.” Addon just nodded.

It was late and they sent Addon to bed in the guest bedroom. After their mom left, Addon laid down on the sleep-couch and fell into a deep sleep.

The Jedi charged the young man attacking him with all his might.

No, no not this. Addon thought starting to twist and turn in his sleep.

The Jedi brought up his lightsaber and sliced the young man’s chest.

“NOOOOOOOOO,” Addon yelled waking up.

Tarah ran in and sat Addon up.

“It’s ok, it’s ok. It was a dream,” she said sitting down next to him.

Addon chocked back tears and lay back down. Tarah sat on the side of the bed and started singing softly. Addon fell back into sleep. A sleep without any dreams.
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 4:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

not bad... not bad at all =) cool story =D
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 5:51 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

thx Cool
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 12, 2006 2:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

very nice

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